The Incident Read Count : 23

Category : Stories

Sub Category : Suspense/Mystery
It was a dark and Rainy night.Patrick was laying in a torn,light blue, smelly hospital bed.In the room was old and Rustic Machines,a green,ripped,rusty chair,and a broke ceiling light that wouldn't stop twitching.Patrick was to weak to stand up ,He slightly leaned over to look out the door into the hallway. He couldn't see anything, but his eyesight wasn't as well as usually.He laid back down and looked up at the ceiling, the light was bothering him.He heard breathing .he made up some strength to get up he walked slowly and quietly to the doorway he looked to the right and saw Nurse.He Rubbed his eyes trying to Identify her .she was wearing a short white and blue dress that was slightly torn.Her hair was blonde and clipped in the back , It was very dirty and oily.Then In a Cheerful,High pitched voice,That was slightly creepy, she said "You should be in bed mister"! He rubbed his Eyes again,walked back to his bed and fell asleep.


  • thats a good story

    Dec 19, 2019

  • Lorena Alves

    Lorena Alves


    Dec 20, 2019

  • Some improvement needed in the presenting and some areas sound off, I'd suggest to always at least read over your work. Other than that, good start to your story

    Jan 02, 2020

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