What..? Sis..? Chapter 2 Read Count : 156

Category : Stories

Sub Category : Drama
Chapter 2 - Comprehension

As I was taken to my aunt's home where my sister was,  just to spend the night, I asked her in the middle of the car ride "Why can't you take care of us? " suddenly I felt like the atmosphere inside the car got heavier and then I heard her say in a soft tone " I don't want to remember your mom " I was shocked, how childish must she be? I though, but all I could do is stay silent, I couldn't ruin the plan. 
 It was 11 PM when I arrived to my aunt's house, a big house that screamed out to me that it was a rich person's home, and knowing my family lived in poverty while my aunt lived this way and didn't ever help us, made me sick, she walked to the door and opened it, never looked to my face as if it screamed my mother's name, so i walked into the house nice and slowly so I could irritate her, but it seemed she didn't care, I remember the scent of roses and I was reminded of what I have to do, get my sister and escape, I asked my aunt if my sister had already eaten, she responded with "Yes, she has" I nodded and said I wasn't hungry and was going to bed, I walked to the stairs and saw all of the pictures, it was weird they had pictures of my sister but not of me, I started wondering if they intended to keep my sister and leave me out, my aunt is a psychologist, so I often saw weird stuff around the house, like kid toys despite knowing that they didn't have any kids. 
 Finally I was at the door's room, past this point I would see my sister, I took a deep breath and entered it, my dear sister Anna looked at me and it took a few seconds for her to realize it was me and she screamed my name and ran towards me, I got on my knee's and hugged her, she was sobbing and hiccuping,  that I couldn't bare it anymore and cried too, I remember her saying "Daddy and mommy died" I was surprised, my 4 year old sister knew what death was, I couldn't handle it and I said "No, god needed them in heaven, we will seem them one day, don't worry Anna" slowly she stopped sobbing, and so I looked at the clock, it was midnight, and I knew this night had to be the one, where me and my sister escape from everything and everyone I looked at her and said it's time to sleep, she said "okay Thom", she got in her bed and I kissed her soft forehead, she gave a smile and said "Nighty night, I love you Thom" and I said "I love you more, sweet dreams sis."

Comments

  • I think the way you can get your ideas out are amazing. You have really interesting thoughts and you can make one part flow to the next well. Although, you do have a few small spelling issues. & You really could work on Grammar/Puncuation. You have alot of compound sentences. And maybe since the length was alot better, you could give some space between paragraphs now ^^ That would make it appear better, and be easier to read. But amazing improvement >< Can't wait for more.

    May 13, 2018

  • Nita Diann Lynn

    Nita Diann Lynn

    Id love to read more

    May 23, 2018

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