The Intruder Read Count : 112

Category : Books-Non-Fiction

Sub Category : Biography
One day there were three boys they were all 12 years old. It was a school day like any regular school day, it was an old-school.One day they called about an Intruder in the school.Everybody was scared but only two boys were in the hallway. What had  happen was  every door was locked, Zachary couldn't get in. Zachary said to Jonah, let's go downstairs there's a hiding spot down there.Well when they did there was a man standing at the end of the hallway. Zachary said, hello who are you? Jonah and Zachary we're quiet Zachary said to Jonah, hey who are you? can you answer me? The man standing in the hallway look kind of like a janitor, but don't janitors always stay and go to school and clean? the school like normal janitors?That's what they thought it was a normal janitor, but it wasn't a janitor, it was the intruder. The Intruder pulled out a knife which, Zachary and Jonah said to each other, let's go to the bathroom they both agreed. When they did they turn out the lights and went to the stall and lock the door. When they did they heard footsteps coming to the bathroom door, and opening the door Zachary and Jonah we're breathing hard trying not to. Zachary done the stupidest thing he said to Jonah, Let's crawl under the bathroom stall.  The Intruder he opened the stall until he got to the one trying to open it and it scared Zachary, and Jonah they crawled, and they open the door, and they ran and they ran. Although when they made it out there's no sign of the Intruder again but Zachary and Jonah said to each other, let's never skip class again I think we learned our lesson, Zachary said, I think we did too let's get out of here is he gone? Jonah said, I think so. Although the intruder was never seen again but the next day that same school a teacher was missing no sign of the teacher just an empty desk.Okay Jonah let's not tell anybody about what happened cuz he might kill us, Zachary said okay let's just go home. At that  same night there was a car starting. Zachary looked.Zachary said, look is it the intruder? Jonah said, it looks like it.Although we never knew what happened that night since the car started and the Intruder was inside of it Jonah and Zachary were never seen again.

Comments

  • Lack of punctuations make it hard to read. I think I get the idea, it's not bad. Just let the reader know how the sentence is supposed to stop and pause.

    Feb 01, 2018

  • Arili Deakins

    Arili Deakins

    OK I'll fix it and update it thanks

    Feb 01, 2018

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