Category : Stories
Sub Category : Horror
On one sunny afternoon sarah woke up and decided to get ready to go for her daily walk. While she was having a shower she started to hear weird noises going on downstairs in the kitchen so when she was done her shower she was just curious as to what was making the noise downstairs. So she got her knife from the bathroom drawer she went down the stairs as soon as she reached the corner to go into the kitchen the noise had stopped all of a sudden. When she looked noone was there so she made sure noone was around or in the house so she went on with her day. So sarah finished getting ready as soon as she was about to head out sarah heard the same noise coming from the living room this time instead of the kitchen this time ....
Comments
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i like it alot, but the one thing is that the title doesnt quite match the story. if her day turns horror you have to show that she is truly scared. there has to be something that scares her. a noise in the kitchen can be scary if you live alone and have no pets. but it makes the reader curious about what is making the noise and what is it doing?
Jan 24, 2018
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you got some potential as a writer but I well tell you like I tell most people who've ask me to read their stories your story has its ups and downs and believe me when I tell you it's not half bad but it is a little short I suggest if you're going to write stories Weatherby horror romantic comedy or sexual a story must have three things the first is dedication like all good things in life you must be dedicated to writing your story whether it be long or short number two give more info about the characters who are they what's going on with them how did they get in the situation that they're in things like that number 3 in case of writer's block it's always good to go back and look at movies video games and other people stories to help inspire you because a story is only as good as the writer makes it and what makes a writer good is the things around him or her that inspires them and just in case if you need a fourth thing to add to your list take as many rest as you can when working on a story
Jan 24, 2018