Category : Stories
Sub Category : Horror
Intro I'm not a very good writer but I just had to share this I write what ever comes to mind so might not be to good anyway hope it's good here goes nothing Chapter one : my daughter's imaginary friend Like most children they have imaginary friends so when my daughter Courtney told me about her invisible friend Mr Jones I thought nothing of it I had nothing to worry about or so I thought my daughter is 5 she had a very active imagination well what child doesn't anyway I wasn't worried untill about 2 weeks ago Courtney told me all about her day with her invisible friend (well with me jones) nothing to unusual but then she told me something no mother wants to here there child say she said '' mommy why did Mr Jones kill his family and then himself I was stunned I asked her simply who had told her that or where did she hear it from she told me that Mr Jones is the man that is in her closet who talks and plays with me now I thought she had just seen a glimpse of a commercial of some new horror movie or that she made it up still I don't think she would have I mean a 5 year old saying that bluntly as day no way still that still made me worry but it got worse. Chapter two: her drawings Courtney loved to color and draw I loved that she loved art she drew butterfly's and rainbows all the usual as I was looking through her drawings I saw one that was very scary for me to see and know that she drew it the drawings was very black and red with what looked like blood anyway he had a tall black hat at least it looked like a hat he had dark black eyes short cut hair brown hair it looked like a man of course I was worried but what scared me the most was the meaning behind them this wasn't the first drawing either one was where it looked like her laying in bed and her closet door was cracked and all you could see was what looked like a smile but jot a friendly one I pieced what she had said about her imaginary friend Mr Jones how he stayed in her closet hut yet killed himself and his family that frightens me to know that my daughter must actually be seeing this thing I was very worried I had a talk with her she of course just thought nothing of it so I just kept very close watch on what she did a month or two passed and she had said nothing of this Mr Jones but I would here her playing and giggling I pretended like I liked this Mr Jones but I was actually terrified for me and my daughter's safety when I thought was just a imaginary friend would actually turn out to be something worse that I wasn't expecting this to happen tho Chapter three : her dreams and the bruises she had A couple of weeks ago she started having these horrible night terrors that would terrify her I was concerned but I was even more concerned about her bruises she had evey time she would wake up she would have a fresh bruise some people might think that I did them but I love my child she is my world my baby girl I would never hurt or harm her so I asked her about her dreams first she said that she would be in a dark place scary she would say then she would say that all of a sudden Mr Jones come out to play I froze her and this mr Jones I had simply had enough just hearing his name made me want to grave her and run but it's worse she could feel him touch her she would be drug into the closet and he would hurt her that made me think is this a imaginary friend of is it a actual man I was angry but scared she cried and I would touch the bruises I just hugged her and held back the tears no mother ever wants to see her baby in pain I had had enough she had had night terrors and more bruises almost evey night for almost a full week I took her to her grandparents house she loved it there and I was hoping she would be able to sleep and rest with out the so called Mr Jones it worked but I was more horrified then ever this is when I knew it wasn't an imaginary friend but some type of demon here is what I found and how I found out Chapter four : the terrifying truth I had gathered up everything that I had know and heard of Mr jones from what Courtney had said and I went to my local library from what I know about ghosts and imaginary friends is that neither one cant harm u but can make u harm your self I was scared for my daughter safety because I couldn't think if a harmful ghost or something makeing my daughter hurt her self anyway I searched the history of Mr jones and turns out he Mr William Anthony Jones had brutally killed his wife and daughter and then him self there was a whole report in him I was shocked and scared everything my daughter had said about him had been true the scary horrifying terrible truth she hadn't told me how he died she just said that he live in. Her closet well here is what the report police report had said Mr William Anthony Jones a 33 year old male had brutally shot and killed then cut up his wife Elisabeth withering jones and his daughter Sarah Kim jones his wife being 30 years old and his daughter being only 5 he was very intoxicated with drugs and alcohol neighbors say they heard screaming and yelling they were having a fight typical of them he was a heavy alcoholic with no job and his wife barely making enough money to feed her family supposably he had gotten the gun and pointed at her not knowing his 5 year of daughter was watching he without regret pulled the trigger and the bullet went straight through her head instantly killing her at once his daughter screamed he had chased her beat her shot her then sadly raped her as if that wasn't enough he had cut them up and buried them in his back yard I stopped reading shocked at such a horrible crime this man had done that wasn't all after he had realized what he had done he couldn't handle it he went into his daughters room and cried but then he crabbed a rope from out side and hung him self out of grief and self hatred. His mother and past history was horrible enough he was a crazy mad man any way I knew with had to do something I didn't want nothing to do with a crazed demon man haunting my daughter and feeding on her fears so I moved I moved back in with my mom in Mississippi the bad part was that and house was just a few blocks from my mom's house. Chapter 5 I think it's all over It's been a year now Courtney is 6 and is a happy going little girl I had forgotten about Mr jones not really but I didn't never want to speak of his name just because I was scared he might come Courtney started school she is doing well she hadn't had no night terrors and no bruises thank goodness I'm not staying awake all night thinking if something bad Will happen to my daughter we are happy and back to a normal family I'm glad we moved I'm personally just glad it's all over. THE END written by Janna brower thanks for reading hope you enjoyed if you liked this one there is more to come different types of storys not just horror anyway have a wonderful day ❤️
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I think the story is good. Just some advise firstly, as a point, I am just an amature writing so there may be terminology for this or better advice. However, I personally feel that you could go further into your writing. What I mean by this is you could add in more details as the mother would see and hear them. Such as describing the scene where the daughter goes to talk to the mother. Have the conversation between the two rather than just tell the audience that what she said was strange. For example: I looked at her with a shocked expression. "Where did you learn such a thing." She replied "Mr. Jones told me." It's just and idea/suggestion about something I learned in creative writing class, so feel free to disregard if you don't like the idea.
Jan 19, 2018