Darkness Part 2
Read Count : 125
Category : Stories
Sub Category : Suspense/Mystery
As I opened my eyes.....I noticed I cannot move. This wasn't no ordinary hospital my vision is blurry but I can try to make out the letters on the wall......S....A...L... someone is coming, I quickly shut my eyes but as I peek through them I see a beautiful woman with blonde hair and what appears to be red eyes.Where the hell am I? I thought to myself. Who are these people? She moves in closer and her badge says Karen.... I'm scared now because Karen is my mom's well was my mothers sister who supposed to have died when she was 10.....so I spring up from the bed and begin to run...I'm headed down a hall way and entered to the next room...but you won't believe what was in there??????? Comment next for the next part. Tell me what you think.
Comments
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It's a good theme, fast paced and engaging. I think you went a little too quickly out the door. It would have been good if you allowed me to feel the buildup of your panic with you. I mean, when it dawned on you this was a dead person standing over you, the hair standing up on your arm, the escalation of your breathing and heart rate... Good job
Jan 04, 2018
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