Clueless Chloe
Read Count : 144
Category : Stories
Sub Category : Suspense/Mystery
Chloe. Me. "Let go, Chloe!" my gym teacher, Mr. Paulson instructs. I let go. "Next! Terrible, Chloe. Okay, Jess! Take it from here!" Mr. Paulson says. I sniffle. I felt stupid.
My new friend, Kylie grabs my shoulders. "Uh, what was the problem back at gym?" She asks. "Kylie! For the last time, I was terrified!!" I cry.
Then I knew it: I am clueless.
Comments
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not bad but it could use more description How was she holding her gum teacher, were they training for a sport, maybe basketball, wrestling, gymnastics. What are some of the physical description of the people: She nervously moved a stray strand of her auburn hair from her... face... let your readers see, but also don't paint a perfect a picture either. Give them some clues, but they like to fill in the blanks.
Nov 25, 2017